www some well developed script ideas here both through dialogue and action lines, clearly showing ambition and thinking not only about what is said but also what is heard and seen.
ebi perhaps too ambitious and may need some cuts. I would also consider moving towards reducing the dialogue further to make more from the camerawork. You also need to consider the brief which is to include match-on action through a doorway.
www some well developed script ideas here both through dialogue and action lines, clearly showing ambition and thinking not only about what is said but also what is heard and seen.
ReplyDeleteebi perhaps too ambitious and may need some cuts. I would also consider moving towards reducing the dialogue further to make more from the camerawork. You also need to consider the brief which is to include match-on action through a doorway.